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The Chronicles of Langdon P. Rutherford - Act 1 by homunculus888 The Chronicles of Langdon P. Rutherford - Act 1 by homunculus888
In which Dr. Rutherford's life takes an unexpected turn.


Art by Xermanico
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Given 2013-09-13
:iconlynziathehedgehog:
LynziatheHedgehog Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013
he j.p died? huh a diary
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:iconmachineking18:
MachineKing18 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student Writer
I have a question about the PDF format. How do I submit PDF format writing to dA?
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You just choose your pdf file when submitting a piece.
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:iconmachineking18:
MachineKing18 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student Writer
okay thanks.
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:iconleopardbomb:
LeopardBomb Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Well, the PDF format doesn't work on my computer, I'm using OSX lion.
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the feedback. Here's the first part in text if you're interested homunculus888.deviantart.com/a…
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LeopardBomb Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you, it looks very good.
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure.
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Blueeyes0001 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Congrats on the DD! It was well deserved! :clap: 
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much!
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Blueeyes0001 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
you're welcome! :)
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:icondeassumpcaostudio:
DeAssumpcaostudio Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
kick a**!:D (Big Grin)
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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:iconimagineapplescruffs:
ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

By the way:

 

"And the vile? What was held within?"

 

You might want to amend it to "vial". There's a difference, but I'm sure you know that and it was an accident. :D

 

:peace:

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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good catch! It's been fixed. :)
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:iconimagineapplescruffs:
ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool! :)

There were some other spelling errors but I didn't want to nitpick. But I find that reading a work aloud to anyone willing to listen or to pretend to listen (;P) helps me catch spelling, grammar, and syntax errors. Also missing words and extra words. Somehow, hearing your own voice helps you pick out how to improve something if it just doesn't sound right. :)

:peace:
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
What other misspellings did you notice?
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:iconimagineapplescruffs:
ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah. Can't remember at this point. But it's not a big deal; you'll find them if you look it over again. And I'm sure that we all still know what you're trying to say, so it really isn't grossly misspelled; just typos you know.
I'm sorry that I couldn't be of more help right now.

:peace:
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem.
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:iconimagineapplescruffs:
ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool!

:peace:
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ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

Cool! Reminds me a bit of Edgar Rice Burroughs and Edgar Allan Poe mixed together! I love both of those Edgars! :love:

Not really crazy about the PDF format; takes too long to show up on my screen. But it's not a big deal. :)

 

Congrats on the DD, my friend!!! :clap:

 

:peace:

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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm so glad those influences came through. The pdf's can be difficult, but they're handy to update with edits. 

Thanks for your remarks! :D
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ImagineAppleScruffs Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I see. I guess they would be easier. :)

You're very welcome! :D

:peace:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow... I quite like it - because, and in spite of, its extreme wordiness.
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! Do you mean the kinds of words or the amount of them?
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
The former - it's very Victorian in style.
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, yes. Indeed!
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robson666 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist
congrats on the well deserved Daily Deviation
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
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TheNimster Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm really glad that you got another DD, congratulations! I know you put much effort into the story, it's great that people recognize that! :)

Great job, Mitch!
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's always nice to have your efforts appreciated. Much appreciated.
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SilverSoulArtist Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh my gosh this is so epic!!! :wow: I really love the perspective and the villains face smirking downwards on him! Also the grey tones of the folds in his shirt :love:
Congratulations on the DD! You deserve it! 
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's actually the preview image for the story. Are you viewing this on a mobile Android device? On mine the pdf doesn't work so all you see is the picture instead of the text.
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SilverSoulArtist Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Aaahh I see now! Yes I was on mobile and saw the preview for it. I just switched to my laptop and can see the text now :) I shall read it!
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Great! Let me know what you think.
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Kibikayuki Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
This is brilliant! I don't read much anymore because I wore myself from studying, but this kept me hooked and it was extremely intriguing!

Congrats on the DD! It was rightfully deserved! :clap:
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I appreciate that! You know, once you learn everything you won't need to study anymore. Then you can read all you want. :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
:clap:Congratulations on the Daily Deviation :heart:
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:iconhomunculus888:
homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey, thank you very much!!! :happybounce:

And thanks for suggesting it :glomp:
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
Your fabulously welcome :iconfabulousplz:
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TheNimster Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I already stated my opinion before, and it only got better with this read. I can see a few details being corrected here and there in the PDF version, which made the story a smoother read overall. The form of language you used is really interesting to read (I mentioned this before), it sets the atmosphere to perfect.

You build suspense in a very good manner, and I want to elaborate on this.

Many writers (Myself included) sometimes blow small things out of proportion to create a sort of cliffhanger, because we aim to keep the reader hooked. Now, this is a bad thing because you can't just go making mountains out of mole hills and hope that people find that interesting. It reads too artificial, it isn't spontaneous. You, on the other hand, seem to create an atmosphere of suspense very naturally and without awkward twists. Your style is just the right combination of spontaneous and planned out, and I can tell you have an idea that you follow as you write. I can also tell that you have a healthy attitude about your writing. This is a quality in literature that's sincere, your work is naturally beautiful rather than surgically modified, so to speak. That's what makes me want to read more and more of it. 

As for the PDF format, along with the artwork and my previous comments, it made me realize that I should seriously advise you to attempt and get this published once it's completed. I mean, the story is brilliant and the form is flawless, why not try to expand your audience in that way?
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homunculus888 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I very much appreciate your comments. I am considering submitting this first part as a complete story but I'm waiting to hear from a couple of other publishers before going ahead with this one.
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cougashika Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This story reminds me of the work of August Derelith and Lin Carter, who in turn derived their styles somewhat from H.P. Lovecraft. The Victorian manner of speech, the descriptions of the doctor's abode and that of his nemesis were clear, precise, and brought out distinct visuals in my imagination. This was enjoyable reading the likes of which I haven't had in quite a while. I eagerly look forward to your next installment.
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